Today in class we did a group activity about our writing assignment E-mail Etiquette. We broke up into groups and read aloud our assignments and gave feedback on each person. Each person essay was different and every one had different opinion and good feedback on each paper.
When reading my essay and listening to feedback in class I learned my paper had lots of personal emotion to it. In the outlines it explain about the use of personal emotions in the essay, the e-mail is more complex than what it seems. When your not use to writing everyday its hard not to use; (me, you, no, your) and meeting the length requirements of six sentences and at least three paragraph of such a simple topic. When I first set down to write my paper it took me thirty minutes just to think of the first paragraph, I see what writers mean when they have writers block I was stuck on the one paragraph and didn't know where to go with it.
So after discussing the papers most of the member in my group had met with the tutor and had a lot of good feedback. I met with the tutor after class and sitting with someone one on one help me to realize what I was doing wrong, she explain to me that its a paper that is asking for reconsideration of a grade, and the instructor does not care about your personal feelings, you need to plead your case. Why you failed, what was different from the last assignment that was so different about this assignment. She explain to me, I need to plead my case, as if I was a lawyer pleading my case to a jury, so after talking with her she pointed my problems out.
I'm going to take another shot at my paper and rewrite the entire paper to see if I really understood what the tutor explain to me, she also told me if my paper was suppose to have lots of emotion to it, I would have done a great job on it but I need to focus on pleading my case and stating the facts. So I'm going back to the drawing board for round two of Email Etiquette.
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